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Wednesday, 6 September 2017

i did finish creating wrting

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one very hot day I went to find a job so I can help with the bills and get food  I went to mcdonalds if there was a job interview. so i asked the manger but there was no for me at mcdonalds so I went to one of my friend and see if knew a job where i can work there was one job that my friend knew so i went to coupland's i am feeling sick nervous




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7 comments:

  1. you could of done more but its a great piece of work love the picture brah

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  2. this is good but you can do more. And add capital letters at the start o a new sentence. (see if knew a job) did not make sense to you should o put see if he/she or they knew o a job. but great bro

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  3. I understand what your saying kegan, but I think you need to work on your grammar and and a bit of punctuation

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  4. Hi kegan
    I think this is really good but would would make it even more good, you could of added some more descriptive words and lovin the pics bro HAHAH!!!LOL. next time maybe you could add more words to make the writing longer and interesting and make sure the story makes sense :) :) keep up the good work Kegan

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